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Political Poisoning

Submitted by Apostolos "Paul... on Wed, 2024-07-31 18:40

Reason, was it exiled?
What about trust
in our leaders?
This can’t be Earth.
Was I abducted by
a lesser life form?

Someone asked, “Who
would you vote for?”
My answer is,
“Daffy Duck or
the Three Stooges.”

Is this what’s on the menu?
Then skip the main course.
Give me a doggy bag with
antacids and enough Advil
to stop headaches
for the next four years.

Better yet, give me
a remote that
can fast forward
to a time when
choosing a leader
doesn’t lead to
a case of food poisoning.

Did I see the debate?
Yeah, I called 911 to report
myself as a missing person.
I said I’d prefer
being a cold case for
at least four more years.

I did learn one thing:
we haven’t learned
that this little match
played back and forth
is just animosity
in a new tailored suit.

So, let’s remember:
we're one nation,
united, not divided.

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The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

The poem "Political Poisoning" is a satirical commentary on the current political climate. The use of humor and sarcasm is evident, especially in the lines where the speaker would rather vote for "Daffy Duck or the Three Stooges" than the current political candidates. This effectively communicates the speaker's disillusionment with the political choices available.

However, the poem could benefit from more specific imagery and metaphor to strengthen its impact. For example, the line "a lesser life form" is vague and could be replaced with a more concrete image or metaphor that encapsulates the speaker's feelings about the political situation.

The poem also tends to tell rather than show. Instead of stating outright that the speaker feels like a "missing person" or that the political debate is "animosity in a new tailored suit," it might be more effective to show these feelings and observations through specific scenes or actions.

The transition from the speaker's personal experiences and feelings to a broader message about unity in the last two lines is abrupt. The poem might benefit from a smoother transition to this conclusion, perhaps by introducing the theme of unity earlier in the poem or by using a metaphor that ties the personal and political themes together.

The poem's structure is somewhat inconsistent, with varying line lengths and stanza structures. While this can be effective in creating a sense of chaos or disarray, it might also make the poem more difficult to read. The poem might benefit from a more consistent structure, or from using the structure to reinforce its themes and emotions.

Lastly, the poem's title, "Political Poisoning," effectively communicates its main theme. However, the metaphor of poisoning is not fully developed in the poem. The poem might be strengthened by exploring this metaphor more fully, perhaps by describing the symptoms of poisoning or by comparing the political situation to a specific type of poison.

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