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STUPID OR IGNORANCE
I guess I will always be stupid
Ignorance , lacking compendious
To judge with a definition
Or to delegate
Or to meliorate
Pass my own finite
I will not reserve
I will not profess
I will never have the capacity
To archive , the mentality
Of another human being
To the reader I am very passion about this poem
There will be a part 2
And I will be ignorance , if only to personify
The emancipatory judgments in my own mind
My stupidity , is my comprehension
Because ? One persons life time
Can’t be explain , by one word or one definition
And I will be ignorance , if only to personify
The emancipatory judgments in my own mind
My stupidity , is my comprehension
Because ? One persons life time
Can’t be explain , by one word or one definition
I have never seen a dictionary !
That encompassed my history
So if to be smart is refer to a persons abilities
Adverse to his personality
And why don’t we call them by their given name
Adverse to words meant to defame
So if these adverseness
Are superior
To stupidities
Then take a long look
In all the pages of your dictionary
You never asked for a name ?
You will never find a conclusive
Explanation of a unique personality
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Review Request (Direction):
What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?
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Comments
weirdelf
Tue, 2011-03-15 11:44
Oh, I get it!
you've gone all post-modern and self-referential on us! Reading this straight after "A metaphorical place ,my ZOO" that's what it feels like.
The lines
To the reader I am very passion about this poem
There will be a part 2
seemed at first to jar horribly, I'm going to have to read more of your recent work and that was all part of your Machiavellian plot, wasn't it! [hmmm, reading it again I still wonder if those lines are meant to be there, or perhaps in the "after words"]
Seriously man, this is good writng. Why haven't I kept up with you growth as a poet? Oh, must be something to do with being suspended for 6 months. Teehee. Still not spending a lot of time online these days but very impressed with these two works.
Oh, and by the way, you need to check your punctuation. The space always comes after the comma, not before it.
hmmm coming back and editing this comment after re-reading again. I'm not sure about the last 2 lines. Could be stronger.
You will never find a conclusive
Explanation of me
Explanation of anyone
or even
You will never find a conclusive explanation
cheers,
Jess
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press
Wed, 2011-03-16 16:46
jess
first let me say I miss you and your pen is mighty over the sword mentality I do remember all the times we mix it up those where really cool times and to see you and rett go by and forth where priceless
big lov 2u Press
author commentweirdelf
Wed, 2011-03-16 18:10
yeah cool,
but what about this poem?
cheers,
Jess
A new workshop on the most important element of poetry-
'Rhythm and Meter in Poetry'
https://www.neopoet.com/workshop/rhythm-and-meter-poetry