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21st Century Trumpeteer [Sunku Workshop]
"Shit hole"
hard to fix
for Commander
Gutless
"Fire and Fury"
his empty threat
Tweeting
his Trumpets
to raise alarm
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Review Request (Direction):
What did you think of my title?
Editing stage:
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Comments
IRiz
Tue, 2018-02-13 10:05
Interesting
Interesting
You use allusions here nicely.
Rhythm is alarming and engaging.
The first line screams.
Looks good to me.
I am not familiar with cultural refs, though. But I am sure other readers will be more understanding.
IRiz
raj
Tue, 2018-02-13 14:27
Thanks for the read and to
Thanks for the read and to know you found this interesting....obviously this has reference to the compulsive and impulsive Tweeter from your home town Washington...smiles...
Regards...
raj (sublime_ocean)
IRiz
Tue, 2018-02-13 15:34
Lol, that much I have
Lol, that much I have comprehended.
IRiz