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Which would you Choose?
Voices walking 2 beside
No eyes or ears for another
Mockingbirds echo a sing-song tune
All the same, to a worried lover
Moments flee with the time machine
Still they speak to only others
Write it down I beg of thee
How else might I speak, thy brother?
And if those ears shed their deaf
Voices walking 2 beside
Would they be the same Damn words
Or just a sound from deep inside?
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Comments
brittle light
Thu, 2017-08-03 16:07
interesting,
interesting,
the natural voice vs the poetic voice
or the cultured voice vs raw, real voice
or the sane man's voice vs the insane one
or just one ordinary voice with a lot of mental machinations going on in the background?
I don't know, I pick #4
cool, unless I missed the gist.
Al
eightmenout
Wed, 2018-06-13 11:45
Thanks
Thanks for stopping by, Al. It's been a while since I've logged on. Not writing these days. But I do appreciate the visit.
As for the poem, you definitely get the gist. But it's more of a mash between 1 and 3.
Thanks,
Scott
raj
Thu, 2018-06-14 15:32
Hi Scott
Good to see you write again. This one certainly gives a kick to the grey cells. Having read Al's comment and your response makes more sense.
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raj (sublime_ocean)