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The Art Of Silence
To embrace silence is to offer a chance to listen
and to separate the truth from the lies
to decide which is fact and which is fiction
so that the mind will be clear, not blind.
When too many voices are speaking,
there is a risk of misinformation.
Too many perceptions can only bring
wrongful judgement and misinterpretation.
Many people speak without thinking
their tongues wagging, gossipping,
forgetting their own shortcomings
as if they are non- existing
They know not the beauty of silence
which can prevent enmity!
Wise men choose to dwell in silence,
speaking only when there's a need
never swayed by any distraction
knowing that in time, truth will be revealed
Silence is the art of true learning
from it, one gains understanding
as one finds wisdom through listening
and spare some time remembering
the past mistakes to avoid repetition
and begin the journey to self-betterment.
Let the fools boast their self- worth!
It is better to speak without words.
The art of silence teaches humility
so that one can live in peace
and harmony.
Comments
raj
Fri, 2014-10-17 13:37
Hi Alid
A nice poem with good substance. I do note that you have written this in Free Verse. However, I feel if you rework on the cadence it will be one of your better poems. To me the flow seemed lost after the second stanza. The concluding stanza regains the flow. Of course this is my personal opinion. Wait till you hear what the others comment. I liked the title which is consistent with the theme.
Regards,
raj (sublime_ocean)
alidzain
Fri, 2014-10-17 14:05
Hi Raj
I did some tweaking.What do you think?
Alid
raj
Fri, 2014-10-17 15:28
Alid, I had said that it was
Alid, I had said that it was my personal opinion and that you should wait till you read the comments of others. Wesley has already given a positive comment and should over ride mine. I am sure you will also take into account comments of other senior members which should follow soon.
Regards,
raj (sublime_ocean)
alidzain
Fri, 2014-10-17 16:19
noted, Raj
I'll remember next time.
Alid
wesley snow
Fri, 2014-10-17 14:56
I do not consider this verso libre.
Although both the meter and the rhyme scheme are loose they are abundantly clear and makes this a relatively structured piece. I particularly liked the use of assonance in many of the end rhymes. Were they intentional?
It is an excellent poem with a sound subject matter.
This sentence is not finished. Non existing "what?" or did you misspell "they"?
as if there are non- existing
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alidzain
Fri, 2014-10-17 15:18
Wes, sir
I changed "there" to "they" as you have hinted and I hoped that its meaning is clearer. I was referring to their shortcomings.
Alid