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Off Spring
Off Spring
The great deciduous trees seem more human than we,
living their entire lives in four short seasons.
Just as human faces shift and morph,
they too succumb to the frost and autumn hues.
But the icy blanket never lasts forever,
as the ground thaws and new life bursts forth
from the cages of bark and branch
to the light offered by the early spring.
Millions of hands wave in the wind
as the tips of their leaves stretch toward the sky, like spindly fingers,
breathing new life into the skeleton that came before.
In this cycle of life, we can see the meaning so plainly,
as the old gives way to the new, differing slightly from before.
Embracing the discrepancy and utilizing the advantage of being unique
is crucial to the skeletons of the forest.
We are not merely individuals,
we are the flowers, the branches, and the bark.
When winter comes, our lives will end too,
and our offspring will flourish into the newest version of ourselves.
The lifecycle of the deciduous forest lasts but twelve short months,
yet within that span, we can watch the birth of the next generation,
observing as the new emerges from the old,
each unique in its own way, just as we are.
So let us not miss the beauty of this cycle of life,
let us cherish it and hold it close,
for the trees remind us that even in death,
new life will always emerge from the skeleton that came before.
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neopoet
Tue, 2023-04-25 16:25
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Geezer
Wed, 2023-04-26 11:08
Offspring...
The comparison of Humans and the change of the seasons
is a good one, that sometimes takes a rather twisted root. [pun]
The choice of "Their green flesh" is...
However, knot to make light of our family tree, I appreciated the mix of biology
and philosophy. Nice job! ~ Geezer.
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Danny Lion
Wed, 2023-04-26 13:55
Suggestions
Thank you I am glad you enjoyed exploring the thought as much as I did writing it. I agree that there is probably some vocabulary that could use some tweaking. However, for one of my first poems, I am pleased to see such positive feedback. I have taken what you provided into consideration and made the revision. Thank you.
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Geezer
Wed, 2023-04-26 18:29
Absolutely amazing...
Really nice job! ~ Geezer.
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