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My Friend (My Love)

I love you, much like a semicolon-
with an intentional point (and a bashful smile)

The one I can not use
The moon I see
(a rising pale-flagged truce)


Use the semicolon,
To show us we (once alone)
Are now held tightly sewn,

As our memories are fond-
And forego the breaking
Depth of the black and blue,
and a new swell taking

My pause of intention
for the moment in question
the moon smiles to mention,

In love ; we love
A love I make for you
My semicolon (baby)

I will always-

hold you

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that the word is semicolon. A semi column, would be a half a column, which wouldn't hold up anything that a column would. The poem would be rather unique if you had used semicolon, because I can understand the intentional point and bashful smile.
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Right you are! I often muck these two around, and have made the correction now. Neopoet showing itself useful once again. Thank you.

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I am a sucker for a love poem. This is a bold profession of such laden with excellent metaphors.

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