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My Dreams

Submitted by Clentin on Fri, 2023-09-01 09:40

Dreams are like a tapestry of life
A colorful vision of future and strife
A kaleidoscope of possibilities
Of joy and sorrow, love and tragedies

Dreams can show us our deepest desires
The things we think and what transpires
They can be our guiding light
To a path that's wrong or that's right

Dreams can take us to distant lands
Where courage, truth and justice stands
Or to places of wonder and fear
Where our imaginations can freely steer

Dreams can be our saving grace
It's through them we find our place
Dreams can be so much more
Than any reality we explore

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Editing - rough draft
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Not Explicit Content

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Geezer

Fri, 2023-09-01 13:33

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I see that you have managed to keep the syllable count pretty even and around 8-9 syllables. For the type of work you have done here, that is a pretty good count. Once or twice, you came up with a ten, but pretty much undetectable unless you are really counting. When you dropped off to eight syllables, it surprised me, but I picked it up rather quickly, so, a pretty good piece altogether. ~ Geez.
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paul Bartoswicz

Fri, 2023-09-01 14:41

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My sentiments exactly, it truly speaks to me

Clentin

Fri, 2023-09-01 14:46

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Thank you for reading and comments. I appreciate it very much.

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