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If

If I were a poet
and could write in a fine hand
I'd pen my love a poem
only she would understand

I'd compose it down at the shore
where the waves always come back to me,
like my reflections of her

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
Review Request (Direction): 
What did you think of my title?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Last few words: 
Rhymes are happy acidents in my writing. More about love...
Editing stage: 
Content level: 
Not Explicit Content

Comments

Hi, Michael,
A tender and lovely poem. I think what I really like the most is the title. The poet, you, and the poem are so humble, and your final line is full of gratitude. Reflective.
L

Appreciate you stopping by L, thank you!. I almost gave this piece a different title, but glad I didn't.

Cheers

Michael Anthony

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of your title too! I often think of if, as though it were part of the old adage; "I should have, I could have, I would have." I usually
go one step further and say: "But this is what I did." Nice, short and spare piece that sums it up. ~ Geez.
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Writing purely for oneself, is the ultimate in defensive posture.

Thanks Geez! I wasn't sure about the title, but the comments here indicate it was a good choice - thank you!

Cheers

Michael Anthony

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Well done!

~RoseBlack~

Appreciate you stopping by and sharing your thoughts RB, thank you!

Cheers

Michael Anthony

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