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Foul Play

We are struggling too just
Stay above the water.
It feels like we are
Being led to the slaughter.

Every day we fight our
Inner demons.
Going with the flow and
Changing with the seasons.

From the beginning,
Women have been abused.
Beat-up, broken bones,
Battered, and bruised.

A fundamental right has been
Stripped away.
The republicans, a sleight
Hand of foul play.

There is no room
For religious fanatics.
It does not matter if you are,
White, black, Asian, or, Hispanic.

120 years ago, women
Had no right to vote.
You dictate our bodies,
The same as cutting our throat.

Maybe you should walk away,
Leave this alone.
Caution, pretty women can
Become the old crone.

Brings to mind;
Be careful what you ask for.
We are more than
Prepared for the war.

Maybe it's more like,
Pandora's box.
Remember, we're from the
School of hard knocks.

Turbo1904 ♥

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Structured: Western
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Not Explicit Content

Comments

as an example of how to change a little punctuation and a couple of words added or taken away
to make the meter smoother. Of course, you may use and/or delete anything that I have given you.
I like the theme and wanted it to reflect your ideas.

We are struggling too
just stay above the water
feeling like we are
being led to slaughter

Everyday we fight, with
our inner demons
Going with the flow
changing with the seasons

From the very beginning
women have been abused
Beat-up, broken bones
battered and abused

A fundamental right
has been stripped away
The Republicans, a sleight
with hands of foul play

There is no little room
for religious fanatics
It matters not, if you are
White, Black, Asian or hispanic

120 years ago
women had no right to vote
now dictate our bodies
You are cutting our throat

Maybe you should walk away
leave this one alone
Caution, pretty women can
become the old-witchy crone

Brings to mind;
be careful what you ask for
We are more than prepared
you don't want this war

Maybe it's more like
a Pandora's box
Remember, that we graduated
the school of hard knocks

Good theme and good rhyme and rythym, just needed a bit of adjustment. ~ Geezer.
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It seems that the days and hours that people
are available for chatroom are staggered and
not a good match for most everyone. How about
if everyone just shows up at the door, whenever
they have a few free minutes?

it looks like your blood is running hot today! whom ever runs into you should be very careful in conduct! I've read geezers comment/critique and I like it, that is (1) vote, lol...I'm a little crazy today.

*Hugs, Cat

When someone reads your work
And responds, please be courteous
And reply in kind, thanks.

You let me know and I’ll stand by your soapbox. My wife works as a labor and delivery nurse. This hits close to home. What’s worse is it opens the door for the reversal of federal protections surrounding marriage rights and on down the line. It’s just fascist bullshit, and I’m pretty tired of that. It comes down from the top of both parties because they’re rich and we aren’t. Both sides need poor undereducated folks to keep their systems in place for them. People who will vote against their own best interests every time because they weren’t taught they deserve better. I think the Republican Party is absolute trash but I feel like the Democrats are responsible here too and here’s why. When Obama is president RBG is pretty sick, instead of stepping down with a democratic president and the congress in line she remained on the bench. The plan of Democratic national convention was to allow the first woman president (Hillary Clinton) to appoint a woman justice as some token victory to feminism. Well, Hillary lost, and now not only do we not have a token victory we have a total loss. It won’t stop until a Republican justice dies or retires. I feel that’s what Democrats do they’d rather keep these issues as talking points to garner votes than actually care about progressive causes. Please don’t take this as some right wing rant. I’m a democratic socialist with a penchant for Marxism and I’m just calling it like I see it. This is a brutal defeat for women and children everywhere. Period.

Sorry for getting on my soapbox and I love this piece, as a man I felt it was my duty to let a woman write it.

Hugs
Tim

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