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First Love

Submitted by C. Wolff on Tue, 2022-11-08 09:50

Shy eyes soft and pleading,
Unaware you are,
Of my love for you,
Grace me with your sweet voice,
To calm my trembling heart,
Grace me with your touch,
To ease my aching torment,
My days are shadowed with nightly thoughts,
And dreams crumble at your feet,
As do I,
In my silence,
I pledge my love for you,
In my stillness,
I vow to render myself your heart's worship,
Your desires are the rains,
And I thirst in maddening plight,
So pour upon me,
Embrace me,
Drop by drop,
And let me live in these nightly thoughts,
As you look at me,
Blissfully unaware.

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing stage: 
Not actively editing
Contest: 
Neopoem Of The Week Contest November 6th to November 12th 2022
Content level: 
Not Explicit Content

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Geezer

Tue, 2022-11-08 10:43

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A love poem worthy of a young and innocent heart. Nice! ~ Geezer.
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C. Wolff

Tue, 2022-11-08 10:50

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Thx :)

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Lavender

Tue, 2022-11-08 16:48

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Beautiful poetry. For me, it seems much stronger and more mature than a first love - at least a young, innocent first love. There is intense desire and "...thirst in maddening plight." The final few lines are pretty passionate. I like the title a lot, but the way the poem speaks to me, the title falls just a bit shy of the essence of the poem. It really is beautiful language.
Thank you,
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C. Wolff

Wed, 2022-11-09 08:37

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Thx for the feedback! :)

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Rosewood Apothecary

Wed, 2022-11-09 15:32

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Lavender got me thinking about virginity. This one takes me back to like my elementary school crush. Now I’m contemplating that. What nostalgia. It really captures some feelings I remember having with precision. Nice job

Tim

C. Wolff

Wed, 2022-11-09 15:55

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Thx! ...it takes me back too :)

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Jackweb

Thu, 2022-11-10 05:36

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Exquisite lines that house the magical feel.
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C. Wolff

Thu, 2022-11-10 08:21

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Thanks :)

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Entend2u

Sat, 2022-11-12 01:13

Emotion wrought of every line. Loved it.
It's painful for me to say this but thanks for the reminder.

C. Wolff

Mon, 2022-11-14 08:16

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Thx :)

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Entend2u

Sat, 2022-11-12 01:13

Emotion wrought of every line. Loved it.
It's painful for me to say this but thanks for the reminder.

C. Wolff

Mon, 2022-11-14 08:16

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Thx :)

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