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Simply
Simply
I didn’t want to hurt you
I never meant for you to grieve
I'm sorry that I made you cry
It wasn’t you I had to leave
I had no time to say good bye
My pain severe and so, so real
I simply didn’t have a choice
So this end, I had to steal
I had to stop bloodcurdling screams
Haunting me each day and night
Tormenting me through all my dreams
Poisoning my strength to fight
Just remember that I love you
And forever I will be
Standing right beside you
Forgive me, my destiny
So cherish all the good times
Hold your breath and hear my voice
“I never wanted to leave you…
I simply didn’t have a choice”
Style / type:
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Last few words:
Written for a friend who's dad took his own life... Written awhile back, figured I'd post to try out new site and get some feedback.
Editing stage:
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Comments
Kailashana2
Thu, 2011-02-17 11:40
HEY! WELCOME BACK!
HEY! WELCOME BACK!
Your poem could be another version of Lennon's *jealous guy*... sadly.... I could almost hear your whistling.
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=6lLs2dC9NaE
~A
Sparrow
Wed, 2015-06-17 18:27
Beau
This is a singing lament but with other pieces we can see if there are things to correct, this is from 4 years ago so I shall wait for an updated version, Yours Ian.T
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