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spring
forth within a hand filled as of blind hope.
beats the breath of bounds, that holds with in thy heart.
spilled from colors of moon light and darkness.
come to within the light.
which you have held in thy yellow eye.
for feeding thy lust for growth upon me.
bring to soar in the loving grace.
Last few words:
i really don't know why i called this one [spring] it just somehow feels of a time when its is still winter. but spring too.
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Barbara Writes
Fri, 2011-07-08 01:37
Hi night
i like this deep poem, I notice a misspelling in one word" loveing or loving"
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weirdelf
Fri, 2011-07-08 03:15
Spring? Pleas explain the title, theimagery is night-time,
spring is most visible i day time. yellow eyes imply something demonic
lustter is not aword. Did you mean lustre or lust?
Could be something if you clarified your ideas and imagery.
cheers,
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