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Prince Harry's Couldron

There's that black pot
Looming large
And shadowing the kettles,
All sooted like the lot.

There's the master
Lean and tall
And capped, squared;
(encompassed actually)
In checkered skins
and oddly fitting kilts.
A Scotsman on his rite,
A concrete slab afore
The pinafore
And big brother watching
Amusingly.

All we're, all are
Stringed puppets of the Master,
Playing lyres to the tunes
That drop like oil
From his dish,
And flowing like wine and corn
At the mercy of his secret will.

There's that couldron,
Looming black and large
Above the city and the sea.
One wonders what he stirs
Within his secret lake.

There're the stooges
Shadowed in his pomp
And pageantry, plump
And pride and pose.
Mere puppets of his will.

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Review Request (Direction): 
How was my language use?
How does this theme appeal to you?
Is the internal logic consistent?
Last few words: 
Not much here, I just want to know how the poem appeals to you at first read. Then, after reading over.
Editing stage: 

Comments

Thanks for the encouraging comment

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author comment

We are not fucking puppets!
Accusing others of being so may be valid, but as poets don't we owe our readers more than smug derogatory condemnation?

Again, your word-crafting is excellent.

cheers,
Jess
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