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Love and Lust On The Face Of a Man
Love and Lust On The Face Of a Man
Love is the look on a Fathers face
When he is seeing his first child
Wrapped in a swaddling blanket
In the loving arms of an caring nurse
Love is the look on a Mothers face
When she hears her child’s first cries
Still attached to her umbilical cord pink and wrinkly
In the gentle hands of a kind doctor
Lust is the look on the face of a man
That sees his neighbor’s wife sun bathing
In the front yard of their country home
On a hot spring day at noontime
Lust is the look on the face of a female
any ideas?……………………….
So if you are looking for love and lust
Just look on the face of a man or woman and you will find it
Style / type:
Structured: Western
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Last few words:
Ian you are so inspiring
this reminded me of a neighbor a few years ago who's wife was sun bathing by the road on a towel in fron of their home. he got a call came home and talk her they went in their small trailer. that same week they moved. he was military. lol
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Comments
raj
Fri, 2011-03-25 23:18
Dear Barbara
i liked this take on love n lust reflecting through the eyes of a man....would be nice if you add feminine reflections .....
raj (sublime_ocean)
Barbara Writes
Fri, 2011-03-25 23:30
okay
Ian gave me this take on love and lust lol. As for a feminine reflections, I haven't gone their since it may get my overly sinsitive conscience in trouble lol. I will see what I can come up with lol.
Glad you like the take.
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raj
Sat, 2011-03-26 15:08
Ok..i will look forward to
Ok..i will look forward to read it as and when you come up with it...
raj (sublime_ocean)
Barbara Writes
Sat, 2011-03-26 22:29
Ok
Will do. Thinking about it now.
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