Join the Neopoet online poetry workshop and community to improve as a writer, meet fellow poets, and showcase your work. Sign up, submit your poetry, and get started.

Fate Haiku

Submitted by raj on Mon, 2011-03-07 14:05

She stood like Lotus
in a brothel of abused
a stillborn Virgin

Style / type: 
Structured: Eastern
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft

Comments

Kailashana2

Mon, 2011-03-07 14:42

Oooooohh's & Ahhhhhhh's

he released her
from his bondage,
the sky wept with fragrance

~A

raj

Tue, 2011-03-08 14:23

ahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh!!

a droplet of tear
sparkled of her dignity
amidst the ruins

raj (sublime_ocean)

author comment

Kailashana2

Mon, 2011-03-07 16:19

a lifetime opening
lotus blossom
blushing deep-roots

~A

raj

Tue, 2011-03-08 14:04

dear Anna...thank you for these loely poetic responses...which is inspiring...

Her devout spirit
now buoyant in renewed faith
searches for her Knight

raj (sublime_ocean)

author comment

raj

Mon, 2011-03-07 15:08

thanks for your visit and comment....this was inspired by the abuse wrath upon innocent girls in the flesh trade...yes..you are right..there is a dark side to this haiku which you noticed....

much love..

raj (sublime_ocean)

author comment

raj

Tue, 2011-03-08 14:05

thank you for your kind words of appreciation...

much love..

raj (sublime_ocean)

author comment

raj

Tue, 2011-03-08 14:10

good to know you liked this one...this one is an attempt to focus attention on International Women's Day on the plight of those women whose dignity and beauty are preyed upon by those in the flesh trade...

much love..

raj (sublime_ocean)

author comment
(c) Neopoet.com. No copyright is claimed by Neopoet to original member content.