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SummerRain

Soft Rain
Comes in small drops
Feeding grass and flowers
Along with our minds and souls
Relief

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The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

This poem titled "SummerRain" is a succinct piece that seems to capture the essence of a gentle rain in summer and its nourishing effects on both nature and human beings. The structure of the poem is simple and direct, which can be an effective choice for conveying a clear, focused message.

However, there are a few areas where this poem could be improved. The first is in the use of imagery. While the poem does make reference to rain, grass, and flowers, these images could be developed further to create a more vivid and engaging picture for the reader. For example, instead of simply stating that the rain comes in small drops, the poem could describe the sound of the rain, the way it feels, or the patterns it makes as it falls.

Secondly, the poem could benefit from a more nuanced exploration of its theme. The poem suggests that rain nourishes not only the physical world but also our minds and souls. This is a complex idea that could be explored in more depth. For example, the poem could delve into how exactly the rain nourishes our minds and souls, or it could explore the contrast between the physical nourishment of the rain and its spiritual or emotional nourishment.

Lastly, the poem's title, "SummerRain", doesn't seem to add much to the poem's overall meaning. It might be worth considering a title that more accurately reflects the poem's theme or that adds an additional layer of meaning to the poem.

In conclusion, while the poem does a good job of conveying a clear, focused message, it could be improved by developing its imagery, exploring its theme in more depth, and reconsidering its title.

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I wish that was the way we got rain this summer, instead of complete downpours. I do like it though makes me feel like a summer shower

Thank you for reading. A brief thought about a very quiet shower we had today.

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