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A NEW WORLD

A NEW WORLD
I used to fight
in the soul the hidden side and I conquered it
once, i lived the tragedy
of the existence
and her mentor, I became
Once, I knew kindness
to the Poor empty-handed
I counted all the stars, and her sorrow
heart, I sang
I marked, the blue of Hope
in tormented and difficult times
in the abundant Light
in the New Dawn the half-closed eyelids
I passed, the border of Patience
and I built the walls of Truth
I cried in the shadow of lost dreams
I danced, without legs in the Court of colors
and I became a Rainbow
I hid, in the closed windows
with the broken glass
Nevertheless
once, I made without Material, without clay and peat
without Touch, with stone houses and swallows' nests
a New World

Kapardeli eftichia from Greece-Patra
ΕΝΑΣ ΝΕΟΣ ΚΟΣΜΟΣ
Κάποτε πολεμούσα
στην κρυφή πλευρά της ψυχής και την κατέκτησα
κάποτε έζησα την τραγωδία της Ύπαρξης
και έγινα ο μέντορας της
Κάποτε την καλοσύνη γνώρισα
στου Φτωχού τα άδεια χέρια
μέτρησα όλα τα αστέρια, και την θλίψη της
καρδιάς τραγούδησα
Σημάδεψα το γαλάζιο της Ελπίδας
σε βασανισμένους και δύσκολους καιρούς
στο άπλετο Φως
στης Νέας Αυγής τα μισόκλειστα βλέφαρα
Πέρασα τα σύνορα της Υπομονής
και έκτισα τα τείχη της Αλήθειας
Δάκρυσα στην σκιά των χαμένων ονείρων
Χόρεψα δίχως πόδια στην Αυλή των χρωμάτων
και ένα Ουράνιο Τόξο έγινα
Κρύφτηκα στα κλειστά παράθυρα
με τα ραγισμένα τζάμια
Όμως
κάποτε έφτιαξα δίχως Υλη, δίχως πηλό και τύρφη
δίχως Αφή με πέτρινα σπίτια και φωλιές χελιδονιών
ένα Νέο Κόσμο

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Always nice to meet a new friend here.
I found this writing interesting and has a new breath to it.
I would have liked to see a consistant line length, but guess this is only me. I also find it unnecessary to capitalize words such as hope؟ dawn, rainbow....etc.
Hope that helps. Again it's your poem, your call.
Thank you for sharing.
Good luck.

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Hello dearest Rula I also thank you for the new acquaintance
I'm glad for your notes I'll take them into consideration It's really a big help Thank you for reading my poem HAPPY CREATIVE WEEK

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Love the metaphysics of it. The use of color, and the descriptors you have used.

I have a couple of suggestions….
1) place periods at the end of a thought
2) Capitalize the three below…

L10 blue of Hope = Blues of Hope. (My image invoked here is of the Mediterranean sea)
L14 Court of colors= Court of Colors ( my image involed: like standing before the high court )
L15 walls of Truth= Walls of Truth ( my image: the Acropolis…this is sooo strong, love it)

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Good evening my friend Ray Whitaker What beautiful true words How excited you make me about focusing the pointers That's right I feel so moved by your description and words I don't know what to say I'm just finding people who understand me Have a creative and joyful week Thank you from the bottom of my heart
Love frindly from Greece

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