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I am me; my very own me
Do not hail or scorn me
Let me be me
For nothing else corny or cynical
Humorous or dangerous
Moves or "un-moves" me
I’ve searched and have found myself
I’ve reaped the truth of myself
For whatever skin I wear like the chameleon
To please or displease the world
It is still me – my very own me
I may or may not be
the hero the world expected
The prodigy you predicted
Even if I were or weren’t,
It will still be me
Deep inside that hide
So open wide your windows
And look beyond the shadows
Before you pass your verdict
When you stage me for judgment
I may be a trojan beautified horse
With the real me inside that wooden monster
So I plead or plead not
Do not hail or scorn me
Let me be me
For I am me; my very own me
Style / type:
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity):
I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
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Comments
Candlewitch
Mon, 2012-02-27 11:42
Dear WonderGolly,
I am confused by this line: (So I plead or "un-plea") Un-plea is the word that is causing me consternation, to Un-plea would be to deny, reject or refute. which any of these three words would sound better in my humble opinion.
In this line: (I may be or may not be) it would be smoother to rewrite as: "I may, or may not be"
I liked these lines:
So open wide your windows
And look beyond the shadows
Before you pass your verdict
When you stage me for judgment
I may be a trojan beautified horse
With the real me inside that wooden monster
always, Cat
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WonderGolly
Sat, 2012-03-03 12:00
Hi Candlewitch,,,
how are you? thanks for the read and the edit (corrections). Would definitely do the corrections.
(Writer's Block has got me stuck again as well as unfinished works proving difficult. lolz..)
respects.
WonderGolly :)
respects.
WonderGolly
What I love most about POETS is how they write SADNESS with SUNSHINE on their face, caption RAIN with FALLEN EMBERS and paint TEARS using the colours of WATERFALLS:lol
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