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The Gifts We Have

A moment to pause to give thanks
For the beauty and joy that fills our ranks
For the warmth and comfort of those around
Who offer support when fears abound

For the love that our families comes our way
The joy and laughter they bring to us each day
For our friends and their unwavering love they give
That makes our lives a better place to live

Overall it is a wonderful life
With family and friends to relieve our strife
Let us be grateful for all that we have been given
Let our mishaps be greatly forgiven

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The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

The poem "The Gifts We Have" demonstrates a strong grasp of rhyming and rhythm, with a consistent AABB rhyme scheme throughout. The theme of gratitude and appreciation for loved ones is clear and effectively communicated.

However, the poem could benefit from more specific imagery and sensory details. For example, instead of stating "For the beauty and joy that fills our ranks," the poem could describe what this beauty and joy look like, sound like, or feel like. This would make the poem more vivid and engaging for readers.

The poem also tends to tell the reader how to feel or what to think, such as in the lines "Let us be grateful for all that we have been given / Let our mishaps be greatly forgiven." Instead, the poem could show the reader why they should feel this way through concrete examples or narratives.

Finally, the poem could also benefit from a more varied vocabulary. There are several repeated words and phrases, such as "for," "and," "our," and "love." Experimenting with synonyms or rephrasing could make the poem more interesting and less repetitive.

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