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flj011278
flj011278
Jun 01, 2026 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)
This poem is part of the contest:

Neopoet Weekly 05/31/26 to 06/06/26

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The dogs of war

The bombs fall with the dawning of the morning light , shattering the hope of a new day , beneath pitch black clouds of soot and death 

Newly orphaned children wander through the streets of rubble as the fires smolder through the night 

The bloated bodies of friends and neighbors litter the sidewalk as the mourners come to collect their dead 

The wind now carries the echoes of empty promises , fatal lies and the betrayal of words unsaid 

There is no food and nothing left to drink. Even the rain is toxic and there is no safe place to sleep. 

Oh, God Have mercy, don't let them feed us to the dogs.Will we die this very night?Or will we wake to see the dawn  

Will we ever learn oh God, when will enough be enough? Will we walk hand in hand into the dark? Or will we learn to embrace in the light of brotherly love?

 

— flj011278, Jun 01, 2026

About This Poem

Last Few Words: This poem.Was inspired.By the the faces.Of devastated children wandering, the streets of Palestine covered in soot and all alone.This poem is not about politics. Nor am I interested in political opinions from either side. This Poem is about humanity and the lack thereof

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?

Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism

Editing Stage: Not actively editing

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Country/Region: USA

Favorite Poets: Spirit.

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Tink

1 day 19 hours ago

Dogs of War

Hi I'm Tink. What a raw, honest poem about a horrible happening. Your words created pictures just as raw and honest. I personally think that needs to happen for the gravity of it to be seen and realized. kudos to the power in your words. Thanks for your honesty!

I can't suggest anything for this poem. It's honesty cannot and should not be changed. 

I hope to see you one night in Chat where we hang out and talk poems and other things. Would love to have you join us sometime.

Live, Love & Laugh,

(and Don't forget to Write!)

Yours in Ink,

Tink

Geezer

Geezer

1 day 11 hours ago

That is...

 why we are all here; to share our work and become better poets through interaction, critique and advice. Welcome to Neo. Tink is right, the brutalness of war needs to be exposed at the deepest levels, home friends and family are all at risk, keep writing and do join us at chat some night to hang out and chat. ~ Geezer.

Frank Johnson

Frank Johnson

1 day 6 hours ago

Thanks

That poem has got me kicked out of poetry groups because of the rawness of it. So I really appreciate it when somebody gets it. Truth is like medicine.It often taste bad But is needed to heal . The question really is for all of us, from the microcosm to the macro, when will enough be enough? Will we ever be able to set aside our ambitions?Our envy , our selfish malevolence , for the greater good of our friends and neighbors. And what effect will it have on the rest of the world...... We may never know.

Geezer

Geezer

1 day ago

Let me guess...

the places that you have posted this were all sweetness and light, flowers and frills; where everything everyone writes is "Wow, this is great stuff!" Look around here, not everyone writes great stuff all the time, and when you or I don't, we expect to be told what is wrong, and there will be suggestions on how to fix it. You still are not over the hump, our A.I. critic will most likely have some things to say. Remember, you don't have to take anyone's advice, not even the A.I. 
you are the master of your work. But, if you are serious about making improvements to your work and writing skills, you will do well to take some of the advice you get seriously, and try making adjustments. I haven't much to say about this piece, I am not sure if I could make any improvements, so I will be quiet here on this one. Next time, you might get an earful from me. Again, welcome to Neo. ~ Geezer.

 

Frank Johnson

Frank Johnson

20 hours 36 min ago

Thank you.

Thank you. I appreciate input and advice Constructive criticism is always welcome 🙏 

patrickgadoury

patrickgadoury

1 day 7 hours ago

What can I say

The content of this poem is, like others have stated, very clear and powerful.

To enter final polish, I would take care of your punctuations, just go through them with a fine tooth comb. Question every space, comma and period or lack thereof. Try to visualize the reader reading it aloud, what guidance can you give them?