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On Your Knees...

Submitted by Geezer on Sun, 2020-01-19 08:39

The night creeps in
on hands and knees
too ashamed to face the day

It gives no clue
of why it cries
if it knows, it wouldn't say

It brings the nightmares
and with it Darkside
pulled from within your shell

Full of teeth and claws
to rip apart your dreams
and take your soul to Hell

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Structured: Western
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Geezer

Sun, 2020-01-19 19:06

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Glad you liked it, but not that you suffer so. Thanks again, Geezer.
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lovedly

Sun, 2020-01-19 14:36

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is a life's shadow
it keeps coming and does go
you Gee
also know
this poem of yours
overshadows

Geezer

Sun, 2020-01-19 19:09

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and I never know enough to just wake up! I panic and run! Thanks for stopping by lovedly.~ Gee.
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Edna Sweetlove

Mon, 2020-01-20 11:33

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More horrors and hideousity! More vampires, ghosts and ghouls! I see I shall have to contribute to this dark genre.

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Edna
Poet(ess) to the Stars

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