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Tis your life
in poetry of your own creation
though you have a family for devotion...

a life lived in separation
is like dreaming with apparitions
love the days you have today
as time comes
we all will go away
none will ever know
we walked by passed this way
so why continue to cry today

.time without whining or meandering
simply passes its own pathways
it never sways
takes all lives along with it always
so have a happier

today...

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A good one. How's this?

I wish to paint a happier today
and a wonderful tomorrow,
not just today but everyday
so that my life will glow
like a candle in the dark,
giving light to those in need
releasing those who are stuck,
to heal them when they bleed.
Now I know I cannot stop
the evil hearts in this world
but I refuse to let hope drop
because it's the greatest jewel
and I don't want to live my life
as a friendless selfish prick
who thinks he has the right
to be a jerk- that's sick!
I can't save everyone
but I'll help as many as I can.
After all we live under the same sun
so why not spread love while we can?

Alid

Just a few tiny things,

time without (winding) or (minding), (would whining or meandering do here)
simply passes its own pathways
it never sways
takes all lives along with it always
so have a happier
TODAY (No need to shout it is a lovely day) Yours, Ian

.
There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

O I do whine ...as Jess says
and
you meander so beautifully
without pricking
you softly say
there are thorns around he bush

I am happy to accept
whatever you say

And shouting is a misnomer
on laps tops
still i accept your plea
just for this one today

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