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You can but can't
You can take a horse to the source of water
He will bray and nod his head as in nay
but then you will alone be a cause of laughter
he will then at you kick and say neigh, neigh!
first para of a sonnet today
come someone say
how did Loved
bray?
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Rula
Wed, 2015-02-11 00:43
THE UPPER CASE REPRESENT THE
THE UPPER CASE REPRESENT THE STRESSED SYLLABLES (mostly are the main parts of speech like the nouns , verbs, pronouns (if not in the beginning), adjectives and adverbs)
The lower case represnt the less important words (articles, functional words as prepositions, articles and some endings like the [er],[est],[ing]...
For a sonnet you need to put the unstressed syllable before the stressed
|my NAME| is LOVED|
i AM |a POET|
you can| TAKE a| | to the |SOURSE of | er
he will| BRAYand |NOD|his HEAD |as in NAY |
but THEN|you WILL| aLONE| be a |CAUSE of| LAGHter
he WILL | then at |YOU KICK |and SAY| NEIGH,NEIGH!
Does any of this make sense to you? Can you tell me which of your feet are iambic and which are not?
not a bad attempt by the way loved
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lovedly
Wed, 2015-02-11 00:50
i don't write with my feet
i use my hands Rula
author commentRula
Wed, 2015-02-11 00:59
Is that all?
did I mention anything about writing with your feet Loved?
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lovedly
Wed, 2015-02-11 23:01
OOOOOOO
now I //understand
foot//METER
iambic
pentameter
et//CETRA
got it //wow!
author commentRula
Thu, 2015-02-12 02:02
Shookum!!!
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mand
Wed, 2015-02-11 03:41
Hi there
A good effort here Lovedly - Rula has some good pointers! it's not easy writing sonnets is it - stick at it you're doing well.
Love Mand
xxxxxx
lovedly
Wed, 2015-02-11 10:31
thanks for your encouragement
I have little patience
but shall whenever
endeavour
friendly mand
author commentRula
Thu, 2015-02-12 02:07
now I //underSTAND
now I //underSTAND
FOOT//METer
i/AM/bic
penTA/meTER
et//ceTRA
GOT it //WOW!
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lovedly
Thu, 2015-02-12 07:10
long //WAY //someHOW
now I //under stand
foot //MET ER
i am bic
penta me ter
et//CE TRA
got// it // wow!
O//kay bet//TER// some //HOW
what // do//YOU// SAY //now?
author commentjudyanne
Thu, 2015-02-12 07:18
'now' is stressed
and 'somehow' is SOME -how
xxx
'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)
lovedly
Thu, 2015-02-12 07:18
Thanks
I// see //NOW?
author commentjudyanne
Thu, 2015-02-12 07:16
UN -der -STAND
.
:)
Xxx
'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)
lovedly
Thu, 2015-02-12 07:22
I KNow syllables
but don't KNOW where to stress
shall try AGAIN!
author commentjudyanne
Thu, 2015-02-12 07:54
try
so TAKE | a HORSE | to WAT | -ers ALPH | -a SOURCE
he'll BRAY | and SHAKE | his HEAD | to YOUR | dis -MAY
a- LONE | you'll BE | a CAUSE | of LAUGH | -ter HOARSE
be -CAUSE | he'll KICK | and BUCK | while SAY | -ing NEIGH
xxx
'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)
lovedly
Thu, 2015-02-12 08:13
wow
how I wish I was that Horse
so hoarse
will be back soonly....
Judy
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