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YESTERDAYS DREAMS RIPPLING

Submitted by lovedly on Sun, 2022-11-13 09:36

I long to you belong
but it seems you don't want to belong

Married to speed at 16
now when one is oldie
you can only scream

Am I in my dream thinking
at the train speed at 19
Come forget those long since gone times
nothing for ever does for long chime

even gold leaves of autumn die
why then about ourselves lie
come by...

Style / type: 
Free verse
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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Editing - rough draft
Content level: 
Not Explicit Content

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Geezer

Sun, 2022-11-13 10:24

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piece of shorthand that @! I'm not sure that I will ever utilize it, but interesting. I guess your message lies in the telling of one not to lie about lying? ~ Geez.
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lovedly

Sun, 2022-11-13 12:41

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@ implies ''at''
be happy
when first done
lol

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Lavender

Sun, 2022-11-13 20:28

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Hi, Lovedly,
From your title, it feels like time is flowing, rippling away. Things we did in our youth sped by so fast and are now behind us. Better to see things for what they are now, and not kid ourselves. This is how this poem speaks to me.
Thank you!
Lav

lovedly

Mon, 2022-11-14 00:22

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you sure have a vision but
here I read many poems
then spew my view
like fresh morning dew

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