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Yellow Sunflowers - Random Challenge # 10

Locked in two rooms,
This house of cards is folding.
I sweep the floors clean-
You add to the never-ending mess-
It piles up on hoards of demons.
We locked hands- then let go.
My guilt is consuming me,
Eating up my blood-red heart.
I dream under star-filled skies,
And of lavender daydreams
Filled with sunflowers
And my shining luck of love.
I’ll never be the same now.
I took a bite out of Eden-
Reached too far into the tree of knowledge,
Ate the forbidden fruit.
My darling guilty pleasure.
You’ve come to destroy me.
But why should I be the torn?
It was you who sinned.
You who took an ax to glass-
Then tucked the shards inside
Of my trusting heart.
You’ve locked us together.
Forever having me trapped inside a sin.
I won’t be a lie until eternity's end.
I won’t suffocate under the folding cards.
My Eden hasn’t yet burned.
I miss my yellow sunflowers,
So goodbye for now-
And say hello to Mrs. Death for me.

Style / type: 
Free verse
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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Not Explicit Content

Comments

This speaks of a relationship gone bad.
I think that every time you absolve yourself of the blame
your doubts come back to haunt you. I have a little trouble
with understanding the ending though, "And say hello to Mrs. Death for me"?
Or is that just the way to end the story? ~ Geezer.
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