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Wonderment

How can a bird fly
With a broken wing
What is marriage without a ring
Would it still be worth a try

What is an ear that cannot hear
How can music play without a beat
Would the dancers need their feet
Can an aching heart feel a lone tear

What if rain never fell
On a green lush dell
What if you could not hear a bell
Ringing for mass, would you go to hell

What of the vast sea
If not for artic melting ice
No evaporation for a cloud to wet a tree
Our view would not be so nice

Would life continue to exist
Or would we fight and persist
I would be remised
If not mentioning that we resist

All the beauty of our existence
Just think without persistence
Could we truly survive
On just something we contrive

Let’s save it all
And keep our eye on the ball
Together we can stand tall
With the strength of a powerful squall

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But I liked this one. Be careful with cliches, however, for example the most powerful sections for me were
"What is marriage without a ring
Would it still be worth a try".
But the imagery of the bird and the ear seemed less so, just as I felt I had heard these sentiments before.
To leave you with a positive, I found this stanza especially beautiful.
"What if rain never fell
On a green lush dell
What if you could not hear a bell
Ringing for mass, would you go to hell"

Keep writing I'd love to read more of your work,
Nicholas.

Poetry is about favors and perceptions.
To me the message is everything. sometimes we might read a poem and can not see into the poets mind, other times it's as clear as day.
I think knowing the poet helps you to see the poets frame of mind when they wrote it.
Its like psychology you must know the patient before you can diagnose
I value the opinion of all poets, age does not matter. what matters is sharing an experience that can be conveyed into pictures that all can see.
I think that sometimes clichés work as a tool to take the readers hand and walk them through your train of thought. It's not always pretty or enlightening, but it does serve a purpose.
Thanks for your visit and thoughtful comment.
Of myself, I have traveled the world, I have been on three continents and over two hundred cites , please waste no time on wanting to travel it will absolutely give your writing a new perspective.
Cheers.
Eddie C.

LIFE ISN'T ABOUT WAITING FOR THE STORM TO PASS
IT'S ABOUT LEARNING HOW TO DANCE IN THE RAIN.
VIVIAN GREENE

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