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Winter’s Gait
Driving wind screaming
February holds the reigns
Frozen unshod hooves
Gallop for the rains
Atop the hardened frost line
Below pounding trot
A sleeping world waits
Root and spore begin to plot
Winter changes gait
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Structured: Eastern
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Candlewitch
Tue, 2023-02-28 09:01
hello Tim,
this is a very good detailed poem depicting Winter, one of the best I have ever read!
*hugs & love, Cat
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Geezer
Tue, 2023-02-28 09:05
Yes...
I feel like Winter has changed its gait, hoping to throw us off. [the thought did occur to me, like bucking you off].
February does hold the [reins]. Not feeling so alone in that, I see. ~ Geez.
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This must be the place, 'cause there ain't no place like this place anywhere near this place
RoseBlack
Tue, 2023-02-28 10:24
February
Has outstayed its welcome. I love the images of it guiding horses through its many different personalities. Well done!
~RoseBlack~
Abby
Tue, 2023-02-28 10:42
It’s short and sweet. I like
It’s short and sweet. I like it. It captures perfectly the climate I’m currently in, so this hits home.
"To fly is to fall."
Rosewood Apothecary
Tue, 2023-02-28 14:57
Thank you all
This is a few weeks old and I’ve been saving it. The stanzas are essentially haiku. However there is a rhyme pattern that follows western poetry patterns. Reigns/Rains, trot/plot, waits/gait.
I was making it up. I don’t think it’s a thing this hybrid style.
author commentLavender
Tue, 2023-02-28 20:31
Winter's Gait
Hi, Tim,
I like the idea of using the three haiku together to form a longer poem. I especially like the way the poem transitions naturally the way a single haiku does - the first two stanzas defining the natural subject, and the last offering contrast. "A sleeping world waits." Peaceful and calm.
Thank you!
L
Seren
Wed, 2023-03-01 10:48
Dear Tim
You just explained what I noticed. The Haiku and the rhyme hidden in amongst it. I've never known such a winter, such as you all experience. Except through the written word. Which this conveys.
Well done
Jayne
“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats
Clentin
Thu, 2023-03-09 17:00
Very nicely done. One was
Very nicely done. One was good three even better.