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Will You Love Me Day After

Submitted by lovedly on Tue, 2017-11-14 15:59

Will you Love me
day after tomorrow
as you love me
today.

Come and open up your heart
and say
Do let me know
what part in our lives we play

will you love me
day after
as you do
today

come sweetness
my life
my honey
my moon

my sun,
my everything today

will you love me
day after
as you do
today...

Love do frankly
say

Style / type:

Free verse

Review Request (Intensity):

I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing stage:

Editing - rough draft

Comments

Eumolpus

Tue, 2017-11-14 18:22

a song

a nice lyric for song, with strong repetitions which good songs need..the word today and day especially. Always a good question! Tomorrow will tell. Does remind me a bit of the Shirelles famous one:

Tonight you're mine completely
You give your love so sweetly
Tonight the light of love is in your eyes
But will you love me tomorrow?

Is this a lasting treasure
Or just a moment's pleasure?
Can I believe the magic of your sighs?
Will you still love me tomorrow?

Tonight with words unspoken
You say that I'm the only one
But will my heart be broken
When the night meets the morning sun?

I'd like to know that your love
Is love I can be sure of
So tell me now, and I won't ask again
Will you still love me tomorrow?

Eumolpus
I'd rather learn from one bird how to sing
than teach ten thousand stars how not to dance
ee cummings

lovedly

Tue, 2017-11-14 21:47