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Where Did You Go?

Submitted by Geezer on Tue, 2022-08-23 16:37

Hey! You looking for me?
Yeah, you! Uh huh...
Yeah, it's really me
Time.

Look, I know you're important
Just like all the rest of them
What? You thought, I mean...
You actually thought that...?

Hey didn't anybody tell this jerk?
Yes, I get to hurry up and slow down
and even disappear now and then
Well yeah, you would think, happy guy...

Trouble is, because I can do all that
everybody thinks that it's all me
It's not you see, a lot of it is
how you see me

When you look at me straight on
I'm terrifying, infinite, forever
and when you're trying to catch me
after I'm gone, forget about it!

So, everybody wants just good times
I get tired of dancing and all
pretending we got forever, stuff starts
weighing me down, I need a break!

So yeah, I disappeared for a little while
now you are dealing with all the little
stuff that has accumulated these past fifty years
You know the events you went to, the ones you didn't

Alright look, I'll deal with you
we'll kind of fudge out the bad stuff, okay?
I mean, why not stick to the basics
funerals, maybe a wedding or two?

Did you want all the little things
you should have said and done
The goodbyes left unsaid
and the forgiveness begged?

How many birthdays you want?
Well, did you ever notice
people who are obsessed with me
in one way or another, don't get as many?

Okay, so when do you want to start
catching up? Tonight...
Friday? Well, yeah, I guess so
Hey, sounds good to me, I'll see you then.

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Jackweb

Tue, 2022-08-23 18:08

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It seems to be a dialogue poem. I envisage employee talking with the boss in the work place about professional challenges and her good efforts.
He place too much reliance on her ideas and expertise.

Burnout skills are the actions at which you excel, that people identify as your strong points but which drain you of motivation. They are unable to energize you and therefore deplete you without refueling you.

I get stuck with this line: (It's not you see), a lot of it is
how you see me
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"By virtue of creativity, my literary genre is poetry".

~Jackweb

Geezer

Tue, 2022-08-23 22:24

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this is about the passage of time and how we see it. Sometimes, time has a way of slipping by and we don't notice.
We notice all of a sudden, that according to the calendar, the clock or watch, that it is later than we think.
I was wondering where did the time go.? I was busy doing other things and time got away from me.
Thinking about how we try to make time go faster, we say hurry up. Com 'on let's go! The things that we miss out on when we wish time would go faster. "It's not me, you see, it's the way that you see me". When you wish I would go faster, I usually go slower, and when you want slower, so as to get more, I go faster. I can see how you might think of it as a boss-employee situation, though. ~ Geezer.
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Jackweb

Wed, 2022-08-24 02:08

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Great theme, well delivered & punched out into the open.
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"By virtue of creativity, my literary genre is poetry".

~Jackweb

Geezer

Wed, 2022-08-24 23:34

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I hoped that you understood. ~ Geezer.
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RoseBlack

Wed, 2022-08-24 19:18

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It escapes me faster and faster each day. I wonder where the last twenty years went and why everything seems to be moving at lightening speed now with not enough leftover for me to accomplish everything I want to. Great write! Really made me think.

~RoseBlack~

Geezer

Wed, 2022-08-24 23:48

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I guess the more you realize that we only have a finite amount of time here on Earth, it becomes clear that we understand so little about time. When you are not thinking about it, or need more of it, it seems to speed by without pause. The days you wish would go faster, [days that aren't going well] seem to slow to a crawl and you think they will never pass. Such is life; the way you look at time, determines how it moves. How does that old saying go? "A time for everything, and everything in its' time." Something like that. Thanks for your read and comment. Oh, BTW, when you finish your comments or dialog, put a period or full stop immediately after then hit enter and then another full stop and it will separate your signature from the comments. Like this: ~ Geez.
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RoseBlack

Thu, 2022-08-25 13:01

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I will try to remember. Sometimes I hit enter before I separate the two

~RoseBlack~

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