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When Love Comes

When love comes you see its face,
Through the eyes you want to race,

We come together to love each other,
Like your kids or your mother,

Don't lose faith in what you have,
Things will happen good or bad,

for love we fight to stay together,
never leave now and forever.

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Whose heart is that? I think I know.
Its owner is quite sad though.
It really is a tale of woe,
I watch her frown. I cry hello.

She gives her heart a shake,
And sobs until the tears make.
The only other sound's the break,
Are distant waves and birds awake.

The heart is empty, sad and deep,
But she has promises to keep,
Until then she shall not sleep.
She lies in bed with ducts that weep.

She rises from her bitter bed,
With thoughts of sadness in her head,
She idolises being dead.
Facing the day with never ending dread

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