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What Life Means To Me

The end of my time alive
The end from when I arrive
The end of working to get paid
The end of getting laid

To begin the end
The final blend
To go back from where I came
To nothing from nothing - the same

The in-between time
While there, life is mine
The time to be aware
Should I even care?

What kind of man does not make his world a better place?

Why care if I won’t be there
Won’t be aware
Only time does remain
Life is washed away by rain

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Structured: Western
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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Comments

you find that peace in life, that lets you care about what happens to the rest of humankind after you are gone. Yeah, life sucks when you are no longer capable of doing the things that used to bring you joy, but there are still plenty of things worth doing and making the world a slightly better place than when we came into it should count. Nice job in expressing your emotions
without making it seem like you are whining! ~ Geez.
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Writing purely for oneself, is the ultimate in defensive posture.

You tipped the scale, so I added that longer line.
Mark

author comment

after you've gone
you wouldn't know
let other say
this or that
there is only one door
after any !!! show
I'd love you to know...

it's EXIT ...
JUST GO

And I'm out
Stage Left -------------->
Oh...may the best creation become popular
TeeHee

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famous
once you read me
you were known to so many
who also read you and me

stay on stage ....let none push you away
one guy pushed so many
they cried out to me
what should we do
I simply said STAY
many did

you too
will

Life is like a market place. All must return back home. There's nothing in life that stays forever!

Rhyme and verse are very, very tiny parts of a successful poem. A good poem creates a moment of images with something profound lying beneath. These come together to form a high-quality poem.

Beautiful!
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"Poetry is invariably imbued with a sense of calm and serenity".

~Jackweb

Your view is appreciated!
Mark

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well structured and enjoyable poetry. I hope you have more like this.

Thomas

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...so like my lost dreams...the flood

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