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What Life Means to Me

life
what is life
fast or slow
enjoyable or fist-clenching
demanding or relaxing
who am in this contradictory life
how do i know
did i choose
is it good
should i be here
am i deserving...
NOBODY KNOWS
EVERYONES PRETENDING
you dont know what you have til its gone
death
what is death
quick or long
contentful or terrifying
awake or asleep
who am i once dead
how do i know
did i choose
is it good
should i be here
am i deserving
NOBODY KNOWS
EVERYONES PRETENDING
you dont know what comes next til you're there
life is a picture in your head of a distorted reality
life is everything mushed into tiny brains that do their best to push forward.

Style / type: 
Free verse
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I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
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How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
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Last few words: 
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Not Explicit Content

Comments

This line captured my attention:

'life is a picture in your head of a distorted reality'

It seems you are deeply in thought, ruminating about the reality of life.

This type of poem would have echoed out if it was punctuated from begining to the end.

Read your line here : 'who am in this contradictory life'

This line would have written in this way: Who [i'm] in this contradictory life? Whether a rhetorical question or not it should have started up with a capital letter.

It is not ludicrous to fantasize.

I liked the theme of the poem.
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