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We Twist And Turn

We twist and turn
like a storm in the

We shimmer and
shine like stars
in the darkened

Even though the
darkness might
seem blue there's
still more things to
say to you.

We spin like a top
round and round
we spin so hard
we might just hit the

The ground is dry
and hard like stone
promise me we will
never let go.

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