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We Drink of Stars

Submitted by Rosewood Apothecary on Wed, 2022-10-12 12:48

In nebulae we lie in wait
In time we wade through oceans
Vast seas of plasma glow
Now growing do surround us
I drink elixir from your cup
A million twinkling, fledgling stars
I fill your vessel now with mine
Stellar light combines with ours

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I wrote 4 poems in 30 minutes yesterday!!!
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Lavender

Wed, 2022-10-12 16:35

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Hello, Tim,
A peaceful celestial experience. Quiet and calm, but luminous, too. Beautiful title - a feeling of intimacy and deep connection. Hopeful and bold!
Thank you!
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Rosewood Apothecary

Wed, 2022-10-12 16:48

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A peaceful write. First of three I did in one very quick sitting. I’ll see you tomorrow?

Tim

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Lavender

Wed, 2022-10-12 17:28

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Absolutely!
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RoseBlack

Wed, 2022-10-12 19:25

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I enjoyed the connection between connecting on an intimate level and celestial experiences. Well done!

~RoseBlack~

Seren

Thu, 2023-02-09 10:03

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Double post

“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats

Seren

Thu, 2023-02-09 09:58

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This is pure bliss. I'm sitting here at my desk and looking up I can see thousands of stars out of the big window in front of me. When I am lost or feeling alone, they can make me feel whole again.

We love magic in our lives and all we have to do is look up or in. It's right above us or in us.

Bravo. This is a masterpiece applause.

Kind regards Jayne

“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats

Candlewitch

Thu, 2023-02-09 10:04

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like you, your writings are amazing! you open up new doors and vistas for me, thank you!

*love, Cat

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