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Water Nymphs

Submitted by C. Wolff on Fri, 2022-07-22 14:36

In waters deep,

I did forgo,

My worldly life,

As they bestowed,

Upon my tender heart,

Their love,

A fond farewell,

To the world above,

So in their arms,

At their behest,

I gave my love,

For eternal rest.

Review Request (Intensity):

I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Last few words:

Lured into the deep.

Editing stage:

Not actively editing

Content level:

Not Explicit Content

Comments

Geezer

Fri, 2022-07-22 15:08

As old school...

as any I've heard lately. I love the simple flow and the language fits perfectly! Nothing I could add, would make this better.~ Geezer.
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C. Wolff

Fri, 2022-07-22 15:45

thx! :)

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Jackweb

Fri, 2022-07-22 15:39

I love this piece!

The simplicity is very catchy! I would say, you did a very fine work.

Beautiful!
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"By virtue of creativity, my literary genre is poetry".

~Jackweb

C. Wolff

Fri, 2022-07-22 15:48

Thx! Appreciate the kind

Thx! Appreciate the kind words :)

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scribbler

Fri, 2022-07-22 17:02

Hi

I like how you saved the rhyme until the end to give emphasis

C. Wolff

Fri, 2022-07-22 18:27

Thx!

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Rosewood Apothecary

Fri, 2022-07-22 19:16

Just amazing. So many images come to mind. This has been written about and captured in recorded music countless times since before humans wrote stuff down. I love it. Geezer is correct, I would not mess with this, I’d just convolute it.

Really impressed,
Tim

C. Wolff

Fri, 2022-07-22 20:51