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water beds (my first haiku)

fish finished fucking,
both breathless and soaked, must one
sleep in the dry spot?

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Genuinely laughed out loud to this...clever.


Very, very clever. I winced!


and steamy.
Love it.
And reminded of why WC Fields claimed he never drank water "fish fuck in it"

A new workshop on the most important element of poetry-
'Rhythm and Meter in Poetry'

and here we are thinking water beds are cool

great imagery and focus here, title couldn't have
been better, a truly unique poem.

thanks for posting !!!

Soo pithily funny!

I laughed out loud I love this one


Love Jc xxx

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