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Wasn't, isn't, is
It wasn't me who hurt you, told you that you were no good,
It wasn't me who lied to you i doubt i ever could.
It wasn't me who deserted you when life fell on desperate times,
It wasn't me who introduced you to violence and petty crimes,
It wasn't me who spent every penny that you had,
It wasn't me who left you alone at night feeling sad.
It isn't me who want to tear your life apart,
it isn't me who wants to break your lonley heart,
It isn't me who ignores you,who never talks to you anymore,
It isn't me who makes you wonder what life is worth living for.
It isn't me who cheated on you with manipulating pretence,
It isn't me who said and did things that just didn't make sense.
It is me who over you loses so much sleep,
It is me who has feelings for you so deep,
It is me who wants to hold you,kiss you everynight,
it is me who loves you deny it as you might,
It is me who wants to forfill your hearts every desire,
It is me who will protect you from the heartless criminal liar.
Comments
Geezer
Thu, 2021-03-18 07:20
I was/am...
a little unsure about using six lines in each stanza, but... overall, a good piece of work! I would delete the commas and stops at the end of each sentence. I do think, that if you are to use any punctuation at all, you should make it at the natural pause in each line. Check carefully, the lines with [want] in them, as I see at least one that needs an ess. Your title is good and drew me in, [which it is supposed to do] and although the theme is one of sadness, you have managed to convey the emotion quite well. I also like the progression of the content from past to present. Nice stuff! ~ Geezer.
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The Eccentric poet
Thu, 2021-03-18 11:09
Thankyou
Thankyou so much for your comments always happy to receive them it helps me produce a more polished piece.