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Voyage of the Rum Runner... Chapter 6

And so my days of swabbing decks
became nights of plotting revenge
I got my chance during the storm
and rapped a skull or two
I filled their pockets full o' chain
Down to Davey's locker you go
I'll swim for it you see
I'd ruther take my chances
with the mermaids who might
in turn, love me

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nicely done, in keeping with the stream of events.

*hugs, Cat

p.s.
this was fun!

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Good luck with the mermaids- sometimes they don't always play nice ;)

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