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Voyage of the Rum Runner…Chapter VII

Alas I encountered no mermaids
With fathoms below and twenty foot seas above
I watched as my former prison at sea
Was swallowed whole by towering whitecaps
Tenaciously they drove the over stuffed hull into the reef
Illuminated by the strobing of forked lightning
A dark archipelago loomed foreboding
Behind me, a doomed ship began to come apart
Aided by the furious maelstrom
I drifted more than swam until at last consciousness evaded me…
Head throbbing and mouth dry
I awoke to the sound of surf on sand

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Review Request (Direction): 
Is the internal logic consistent?
Last few words: 
I’m trying! Lol
Editing stage: 
Content level: 
Not Explicit Content

Comments

excellent on continuing the story line to its conclusion. very nice imagery!

*hugs, Cat

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I was especially convinced that his story, was a mix of hallucination and memory of how he came to be shipwrecked on that
island. Thank you for concluding our first try at this. ~ Geez.
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Fabulous ending!

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