The below is a computer generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

As an AI language model, I am not capable of giving feedback, but I can offer some suggestions for your poem.

The poem "Unwanted" is a poignant reflection on the painful experience of feeling unaccepted and unwanted. The repetition of the phrase "Born a secret" underscores the sense of shame and isolation that the speaker feels. The use of the word "branded" adds to the sense of being marked and excluded from the start.

The cyclical pattern mentioned in the second stanza suggests a sense of inevitability and hopelessness. The speaker feels trapped in their situation and unable to escape the curse of their birth. The line "Despite how I truly cared" adds a note of sadness to the poem, suggesting that the speaker has made efforts to connect with others but has not been successful.

The final stanza is a powerful expression of the speaker's sense of futility and despair. The repetition of the phrase "Born a secret" at the beginning and end of the poem emphasizes the idea that the speaker's identity is fixed and unchanging. The final line, "And will die the same," is a stark reminder of the ultimate consequence of this sense of alienation.

One suggested line edit could be to change "Number five was enough" to "Five was more than enough" to emphasize the overwhelming nature of the situation.

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Your poem was good as you delivered a solemn message of being isolated and not belonging.
If I could suggest this line, "Despite how I truly cared" to aid the metre; However much I cared.?

The rhyme is good and the poem flows well. I enjoyed it, even though it was a sad subject. Ruby :)

I know about the story; it is a fair representation of your beginning. I will remind you of course, that you have two loving parents who adopted you, and love you very much. That said, I think you have written a pretty good poem. Although you didn't rhyme all the way through, you did a good job of rhyming, and the pace was smooth. I agree with Ruby, that the line could be altered to the line she gave, and it would enhance the piece. Nice job! ~ Geez.
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Hello, Carrie,
So, of course I'm gonna challenge those final two lines. I respect your poem, and cannot begin to doubt your feelings, but after getting to know you at least somewhat here on this site, and reading your remarkable poetry, I imagine you know just how "enough" you really are. So glad you are writing about it and sharing your life - a gift for all of us.
Lx