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Untitled Haiku
Love is a violin,
The high E grips my heart strings
never to let go.
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Review Request (Direction):
How was my language use?
How does this theme appeal to you?
Last few words:
This is one haiku I'm thinking of using to build a book of Haiku.
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Comments
Eumolpus
Thu, 2017-08-03 14:38
Poetic moment
Where's haiku is itself a strictly guarded structure by purists , so many syllables to a line and all that, I am personally not impressed with that take. I believe a very short poem which has a certain sense of paradox or abstract between 2 or more images works. I think the images here connect on that universe and makes a poem. It is unique to some of you previous entries in that it is both personal and impersonal at the same time. Your range is expanding and it is a joy to watch!
Eumolpus
I'd rather learn from one bird how to sing
than teach ten thousand stars how not to dance
ee cummings
T. Harmonee
Thu, 2017-08-03 14:50
Thanks!
Thanks!
"Poetry is music for the human voice. Until you actually speak it or someone speaks it, it has not come into it's own."
- Maya Angelou
weirdelf
Wed, 2017-08-09 16:03
Hey T.
I've tried building a 'body of haikus' with some degree of success-
https://www.neopoet.com/node/2669
I can see where you could take yours in several directions.
cheers,
Jess
A new workshop on the most important element of poetry-
'Rhythm and Meter in Poetry'
https://www.neopoet.com/workshop/rhythm-and-meter-poetry
Kailashana2
Tue, 2017-08-15 08:08
Me, too.
Me, too.
It's about the heart's strings. Opera and a good haiku does that to me too. Enjoyed the tugging.