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The Unmasking

No longer here to hear things said,
Your legacy no more only sadness.
A trail of pain is gained from memories you created.
Why, I want to know.
This scourge of horror tales told unmasking you to reveal who,
Who are you? A brother, a husband? a friend? Or a monster unmasked.
You fooled me, us, them, when?
Full of.ale unveil a predator, my father.
Sorry to say you lost your way.
Your face no more grace, ripped away torn out, by you,
With tales so true.

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I would break up these two long lines like this:

This scourge of horror tales told
unmasking you to reveal who,
Who are you? A brother, a husband? a friend?
Or a monster unmasked.

this advice may be used or not. such a powerful poem...it shatters the heart!!!

*hugs, Cat

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Thank you for your comments and I will take your advice thanks again

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This poem evokes a keen sense of sadness or regret.
Heart-rending, indignant, provocation and fury of expression.

In this poem, I truly love your creative energy.

"By virtue of creativity, my literary genre is poetry".

~Jackweb

good for you!!!

*hugs, Cat

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When someone reads your work
And responds, please be courteous
And reply in kind, thanks.

Thank you so much Cat!

"By virtue of creativity, my literary genre is poetry".

~Jackweb

Hello I'm a bit new to this but thank you for these insights in to my work and rest assured all advice given will be applied.

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