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The Unmasking
No longer here to hear things said,
Your legacy no more only sadness.
A trail of pain is gained from memories you created.
Why, I want to know.
This scourge of horror tales told unmasking you to reveal who,
Who are you? A brother, a husband? a friend? Or a monster unmasked.
You fooled me, us, them, when?
Full of.ale unveil a predator, my father.
Sorry to say you lost your way.
Your face no more grace, ripped away torn out, by you,
With tales so true.
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Comments
Candlewitch
Tue, 2022-06-14 10:49
hello,
I would break up these two long lines like this:
This scourge of horror tales told
unmasking you to reveal who,
Who are you? A brother, a husband? a friend?
Or a monster unmasked.
this advice may be used or not. such a powerful poem...it shatters the heart!!!
*hugs, Cat
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Que
Tue, 2022-06-14 22:49
Thank you for your comments
Thank you for your comments and I will take your advice thanks again
Jackweb
Tue, 2022-06-14 12:24
Poignant!
This poem evokes a keen sense of sadness or regret.
Heart-rending, indignant, provocation and fury of expression.
In this poem, I truly love your creative energy.
"By virtue of creativity, my literary genre is poetry".
~Jackweb
Candlewitch
Tue, 2022-06-14 12:51
nicely stated Onyinechi!
good for you!!!
*hugs, Cat
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When someone reads your work
And responds, please be courteous
And reply in kind, thanks.
Jackweb
Tue, 2022-06-14 13:07
Thank ...
Thank you so much Cat!
"By virtue of creativity, my literary genre is poetry".
~Jackweb
Que
Tue, 2022-06-14 22:54
Hello I'm a bit new to this
Hello I'm a bit new to this but thank you for these insights in to my work and rest assured all advice given will be applied.