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Unit of Measure

I’ve heard the human soul
weighs 21 grams or so
Not so in my experience!

All those I miss the most
weigh much heavier on me

My mind sees their souls
as impossible to lift some days,
because of the burden of their absence

Heavy lifting - as if 21 grams
were as I imagine it might weigh
in the dark heart of a crushing black hole

Style / type: 
Free verse
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How does this theme appeal to you?
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Last few words: 
Looking through a telescope the other night into the vastness of the stars, I was struck be a few emotions. Many of them seemed to center around my longing to see those I've lost over the years.
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Not Explicit Content

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Very good, well crafted, concise poem. Interesting theme, imaginative ideas, nice work, hope to read

Thank you!

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Michael Anthony

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have thoughts such as yours after my eyes visit the [heavens], I think that it must be us, wondering where do those that have left this life actually go? I find your title to be well within the parameters of the poem, and the appeal of this story seems to be universal. We cannot conceive of someone that means so much to us, just dissolving into the cosmos leaving no trace.
Somber, but not particularly sad piece. ~ Geez.
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Thank you Geez! I always appreciate the consistency of your visits, and the thoughts you share.

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Michael Anthony

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nice write. and how true

Appreciate your comments - thank you Cathy.

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Michael Anthony

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Your words could not ring more true,you would think 23grams almost weight ,oh but think again

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Michael Anthony

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That brought me back from memory lane, because I always think about my dad for he left since when I was a child and I wander if there is another world he is living in maybe heaven. keep dropping by thanks.

Thank you Simon!

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Michael Anthony

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