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THE UNFORTUNATE TIME

The fire of time
is burning us
we're now groaning in pain.

Our democracy has woefully failed us!
now a stinge to humanity
What a shame?

New naira notes policy
has broaden
a cloud of darkness!

The anguish of grief,
hunger and a surge of
anxiety has melted us.

Our hopes are lost
in the sands of time.
Where do we go from here?

You've been answering
a giant of Africa but, you've
lost your vigour and integrity.

What ails you to be eroding
at this time your citizenry
needs you?

Your banking system
has nothing to write
home about.

For estimation of
immeasurable queues
lengths and unknown.

We're highly disappointed
in this cashless society
you have Inaugurated.

CBN's new notes swap have
transpired an insurrection
that could bring a ceaseless

uproar, civil disobedience
that could rip the nation into
havoc and untold hardship.

©® Onyinyechi Cosmos Etu

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in this sentence: needs you a lot? remove: (a lot) for a smoother finish to the line. that is the only suggestion that I have.
your poem is a heartfelt plea that stirs the soul!

*hugs, Cat

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you've a bird's -eyes view on the theme of this poem. Thank you so much for reading and commenting. You really nailed it.
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"By virtue of creativity, my literary genre is poetry".

~Jackweb

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i just really like the rhythm of this!! very pretty :)

-m4gg0t was here

you could call me soph if you'd like. 

       The phantom of the opera is there. Inside my mind.

Thank you!!!
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"By virtue of creativity, my literary genre is poetry".

~Jackweb

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I am so sorry that your country is in chaos.

I think this does have really good rhythm when it's read a couple of times I got right into it

Well Done!!!

kind regards Seren

“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats

appreciate your time of reading and commenting. Much appreciated esteemed poet.
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"By virtue of creativity, my literary genre is poetry".

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