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two in one

Submitted by lovedly on Tue, 2016-03-01 15:34

over 6 months deleted

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft

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Esker

Tue, 2016-09-20 00:25

Esker's picture

a tough Nut to crack
Neo is Neo
the punk slam dance
days are done
shocking is not
a club scene
its direct horrid
violence
not lurid composition
but it leaks through
here and there
shows its teeth
so we must be
vigilant
and gallant
enough
to exercise
some restraints
when the world
prefers not to
anymore...

thank U!

lovedly

Tue, 2016-09-20 11:58

lovedly's picture

the PIED PIPER OF HAMLIN
HE
alone will lead us away from sorrow
ere comes tomorrow

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Esker

Wed, 2016-09-21 14:55

Esker's picture

pied piper lead too sorrow..he took all the able bodied children
away....only the lame was left behind and He Missed his pals..
tomorrow.....what of the future then...
Interesting

Thank U!

lovedly

Wed, 2016-09-21 15:45

lovedly's picture

but the lame one
was left behind
may be lame
but able to produce many a dame
he must have
as Hamlin remains unchanged

humans sprung up
may be from his millions
which in his pouch did remain
he was generous
he distributed all
none was born lame

kindness esker
we should two
now lead poets
like Hamlin at Neo too
will YOU!

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