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Twenty-One At Seventeen
By the time I was seventeen I was twenty-one
If you were to judge me on what I had done
Drinking and drugs and worse things
Flying high without having any wings
Crumbling like dirt into the ground
Spiraling further and further down
Buried beneath depression to never escape
I found the truth after it was too late
Needles and blades in my skin deep
What I continuously sewed I did reap
Now the Grim Reaper has come to reap me
I died at fifty when I was twenty-three
Review Request (Intensity):
Please use care (this is a sensitive subject for me, do not critique harshly)
Last few words:
Old before my time.
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Content level:
Not Explicit Content
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Comments
Candlewitch
Fri, 2022-09-02 06:40
hello,
a great poem...it was like reading a page out of my diary or looking in the mirror... you understand. I managed to extract myself from that life/death.
*hugs, Cat
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Depressed 1
Fri, 2022-09-02 06:51
Thanks
Thanks Cat. I am glad you survived.
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Geezer
Fri, 2022-09-02 07:17
Thank you...
Depressed 1 for telling your tale. It may help someone to avoid taking the path that we did and let them live a "normal" life.
It was told simply and most effectively. Typo alert! [too late]. Nice job! ~ Geezer.
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This must be the place, 'cause there ain't no place like this place anywhere near this place
Depressed 1
Fri, 2022-09-02 07:26
Thanks
Thanks for reading Geezer
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