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True lovers endure pain

True lovers endure pain

Don't make haste
just to waste

sex and marriage need
COMPROMISE
at times one is down
at other times the other

the opposite one must up- lift the downer ...
and
then move on...
most of you make haste
and
search another

it's really a waste .....
meditate and recoup(regain) your love
all humans need compassion
both men and women

even men
though they don't show
are often more emotional..

manly ego at play mostly
more of the time
so be friends like a doc and patient
have patience.
Amen..

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I totally agree that a relationship should be a partnership. That's how my parents are and that's how they raised me to be one day when I find the one (for the past six or so years "the one" has been an actor/celebrity named Matthew Gray Gubler who definitely doesn't know I exist, ha!)

If I may make a suggestion, it would be to let go of some of the punctuation at the ends of the lines. I'd say keep some of it, but pick and choose (I particularly like the dashes after "move on"; they make a great visual there). Having it on so many lines detracts from the message a little for me.

Kelsey

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for your maiden visit
and
lovely suggestions
shall abide

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even though I didn't really "intend" to be back. Goodness knows I've got enough on my plate, and most days it's even too much. But I longed for poetry again. The best way for me to get back in the swing and to make a difference is to visit the lonely poetry. Besides, I like being the first comment!

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Which comes about almost naturally if both parties rate the needs of the other above their own.

Keith Logan
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abs right sir

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A Great Author Madam’s Story

Your story is not just a story ma'am,
I have seen many young couples,
divorce. separate stay away
commit suicide
and
some take pains to make their spouse survive, despite the costs and what doctors may say .

This world has all kinds of human beings
some are sympathetic
some empathetic
many are unmindful of what happens to others
they speak with a chilies like source
to slice knowing or unknowingly,
someone they don't even know

But then in actual life most move on,
we cannot end our sojourn
just by our own choosing
there is a power unknown beyond the trays of human imagination
and
so we have to continue

to breathe and feed ourselves
some join another group some remarry, few love to live in past memories
and
your story so beautifully speaks
lovely words emanate from the pen of those who know
what love is
as you do ma'am

You are a sun of encouragement for folks one too many,
so they love and respect you ma'am

perhaps not as much as I do.
God Bless...

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