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Trees by Philip Larkin (The Right Word Workshop)

The trees are (turning) into leaf
Like (words) almost being said
The recent buds (grow) and spread
Their greenness is a kind of grief

Is it that they are (young) again
And we (growing) old? No, they (aged) too
Their yearly trick of looking new
Is written down in rings of grain

Yet still the unresting (wild) thresh
In fullgrown (on) every May
Last year (sweet) (dreams) they seem to say,
Begin afresh, afresh, (afresh)

Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Review Request (Direction): 
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
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Comments

Except for the last word not rhyming with thresh this could almost have been written by the original author. Good work......stan

Done the edit. Just a question. I'm so used to abab rhyming pattern that I missed out on this one. What is the writing style called?

Alid

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