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TONIGHT is NOT THE LAST

Submitted by lovedly on Sat, 2020-04-04 14:20

Oh !
night runs so mysteriously
gradually slowly
like the River in the darkness
silently

all sleep
none can hear it
even if it is snoring/roaring

O what a night
tonight can be
the devils are watching clearly

Is it the last night
o no no no
not at all surely

but it is just another silenced night
passing by steadily
like that last night
went

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Last few words: 
TONIGHT is NOT THE LAST nite wear your nightie sweety
Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft

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Sparrow 42

Sat, 2020-04-04 18:27

"the night" in the first line is not needed, I would prefer an Oh not just a lazy O, or o..
Otherwise quite likeable lol
Take care young one an know we do read your works ,
Yours as always Ian ...

Words can build a nation

lovedly

Sun, 2020-04-05 00:56

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Oh not just a lazy O, or o..
Otherwise quite likeable lol

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Sparrow 42

Sun, 2020-04-05 03:27

I am still watching you lol

Words can build a nation

lovedly

Sun, 2020-04-05 08:20

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JUST 222222222222 2 GYRATE
AH I mean Great

hoz the virus in UK today

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Sparrow 42

Mon, 2020-04-06 03:23

The virus has killed around 5000 people from a 5 year old to a 90 year old a few Doctors and nurses tending the sick it is bad in Europe and the USA is heading for a crisis, we are trying to manage the rate of cases so that our medical side is not overwhelmed and it seems to be doing the job..
You just take care and keep your head down , talk later as things progress,
Yours as always Ian ..

Words can build a nation

lovedly

Mon, 2020-04-06 00:34

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departed souls
and once again try to make human life
whole Ian

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Geezer

Mon, 2020-04-06 08:52

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lovedly

Mon, 2020-04-06 13:18

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for your free and frank views

but wait and see tomomorrrow
i will again be
THE SUN
never sets for me

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